Rough cut 3 + Feedback

This is my third rough cut,
They are a few changes from the second rough cut,

• I have added the end scene
• I have added my second logo

I am looking for feedback mainly on the ending scene, and on the part where it slows down.



This is some feedback i got from facebook.

This is the feedback i gained in class

• Sort out the movement of the geek while the speach bubble is coming up.
• Use slow motion on the girl to give the idea that the geek is dreaming about her
• remove the jock walking up to the geek, so that once the boy has said hi it quickly cuts to the jock pushing the boy.
• Improve the FRAMING!
• Instead of the boy sliding down due to being hit, have him slide down because he was embarrsed
• Zoom in on the final title.